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felrend
anointedflame

Fanfiction writers! Some amazing person (u/Snow_Guard) on Reddit transcribed the entirety of Forbidden West here: https://game-scripts-wiki.blogspot.com/2022/02/horizon-ii-forbidden-west-transcript.html?m=1


I thought I’d share this around because it could be helpful for anyone that wants to include in-game dialogue in their fics :)

bolshoiromanova
soufre-de-paris

GUYS THIS IS AMAZING

SERIOUSLY

6000 YEARS

STORIES THAT ARE OLDER THAN CIVILIZATIONS

STORIES THAT WERE TOLD BY PEOPLE SPEAKING LANGUAGES WE NO LONGER KNOW

STORIES TOLD BY PEOPLE LOST TO THE VOID OF TIME

STORIES

soufre-de-paris

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GUYS LOOK AT THIS

OH MY GOD YOU GUYS

GUYYYYYSSSS

dwarven-beard-spores

“Here’s how it worked: Fairy tales are transmitted through language, and the shoots and branches of the Indo-European language tree are well-defined, so the scientists could trace a tale’s history back up the tree—and thus back in time. If both Slavic languages and Celtic languages had a version of Jack and the Beanstalk (and the analysis revealed they might), for example, chances are the story can be traced back to the “last common ancestor.” That would be the Proto-Western-Indo-Europeans from whom both lineages split at least 6800 years ago. The approach mirrors how an evolutionary biologist might conclude that two species came from a common ancestor if their genes both contain the same mutation not found in other modern animals.” 

sopih

How do they control for stories that were borrowed, which almost certainly happened?

gacorley

“ Unlike genes, which are almost exclusively transmitted “vertically”—from parent to offspring—fairy tales can also spread horizontally when one culture intermingles with another. Accordingly, much of the authors’ study focuses on recognizing and removing tales that seem to have spread horizontally. When the pruning was done, the team was left with a total of 76 fairy tales.”

This article doesn’t say how, but I bet those methods are in the paper.

science-of-noise

For this, they used a library of cultural traits for each culture a fairy tale occurred in, and then measured the likelihood that trait t occurs in culture c due to either phylogenetic proximity (inheritance) or spatial proximity (diffusion), using autologistic regression:

(Autologistic regression is a graphical model where connected nodes have dependencies on each other, except instead of an undirected graph, ALR is a special case that requires sequential binary data and assumes a spatial ordering.  In this case, the binary data are the cultural features).

Cultural traits states are generated using Monte-Carlo simulation and phylogenetic or spatial influence are fitted as local dependencies between the nodes in the graph representing cultural traits.  I can’t find this in the paper (though it may be mentioned in the citation of the method they used), but presumably if the spatial influence exceeds the phylogenetic influence by a certain threshold, the trait is removed.

The full paper is here.

elenorasweet

THE GRATEFUL ANIMALS IS OLDER THAN DIRT!!! I FUCKING KNEW IT!!!

finrays
finrays

Here’s this morning’s brain worm; it takes nine days to get from GAIA Prime at King’s Peak to Carson City on foot.

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There is no way in hell anyone has a ten day air supply, even in 2066. No way. From the town at the base of the mountain though?

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It’s roughly a 10 hour drive. Factoring in a few hours of descent, and a twelve hour air supply, that gives a person juuuuust enough time to pull up to the gates of their childhood home, running out of oxygen, stumble toward the house, collapse onto the bench instead and quietly fade out of existence.

The fact that there’s a car RIGHT THERE in the closing cutscene…

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Take it as you will.

Now! One could argue that with autocars a thing, this would be an easy task. But I doubt they were running at this stage of things; no humans to maintain the infrastructure needed to keep the autocars going. So the much more likely scenario is hotwiring.

One could argue that ya girl is very smart, and seems to have a natural aptitude for machinery. But…

BUT….

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Listen. I’m not saying that Travis Tate taught Elisabet Sobeck how to hotwire a car during the course of their acquaintance.

But that’s exactly what I’m saying.

alightsaberinthenight

Also, Travis’s comment tells us that he and Liz had met before. So I leave you to imagine in what world and what circumstance, Elizabet Sobeck, paragon of ethics and virtue, crossed path with Travis Tate, international criminal and Hell troll extraordinaire.

horizon zero dawn
particolored-socks

arsonist-chicken asked:

Hey :) I've wanted to start trying embroidery or visible mending, so I thought I'd start with my sleeping sweatpants and fix the seams that are slowly coming apart with that pretty stitch you showed a while ago (jesus did that take me many times stopping a video and rewinding). It doesn't look as neat as I hoped it would, but it's just sleeping pants, so good for practicing.

BUT: I got new needles because mine all had too small eyes for the thread to fit (I used a string of a ball of wool that's definitely not wool but some other cheap material, and then embroidery thread for the pink part), and I broke five needles in total for one leg.

I don't think it's the sweatpants' fault - they're pretty old, and at some spots, you can even see through the fabric because it's so thin already. I made one small knot at the needle's eye, and it and the needle still kept getting stuck when I tried to pull the thread through.

Do you maybe know a reason why the needles' eyes kept breaking? Should I have used a thinner thread* or smaller needles? I don't want to break any more needles :(

(*But then wouldn't it be too thin? Like, would it still have the same effect of visible mending if the thread is pretty thin?)

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[ID: A photo of the inner seam of black sweatpants that has been fixed using a blanket stitch with a purple-and-white and a pink thread. There's two close-up pictures, one for the purple-and-white thread and one for the pink thread. End ID]

wastelesscrafts answered:

Breaking sewing needles

Good job on those sweatpants!

There’s plenty of reasons why needles will occasionally break if you’re sewing by machine, but to be honest I’ve never broken any hand-sewing needles before. I’ve bent plenty, but never broken.

It’s important to use the right needle for the right job. A standard sharp needle might not suffice when you’re working with something like yarn or embroidery thread: a crewel needle or chenille needle will be a better fit.

If you use thread that’s too large for the eye of your needle, you’ll have a hard time threading it. Even if you do manage to thread it, it might get stuck when you sew with it as the thread’s larger than the eye. This is not only frustrating, but can also damage your fabric.

Also make sure to use good quality needles. Look up reviews if you can, and take a good look at a set of needles before you buy them. Are all of the needles straight? Are they smooth, or do you see any jags?

As for knots: making a knot at the eye of your needle is an easy way to keep your thread on your needle. However, it’s not always the best technique to use: if the knot’s bigger than the needle’s eye, it can be difficult to work with and even damage your fabric. If you find yourself in this situation, there’s other techniques you could try to keep your needle threaded as shown by this Stitch Clinic article.

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(Image source) [ID: nine black squares on a yellow background showing nine different types of hand-sewing needles labelled with white text, all shown in different sizes: sharps, betweens, tapestry, crewel or embroidery, chenille, milliners, darners, yarn darners, and beading.]

ober-affen-geil
bogleech

Hey so I still see people utterly baffled by how religious fundies (still a majority in America and moreso its senate) react on certain issues so uhhh is it actually not common knowledge what the antichrist is all about? You guys know his defining characteristic is ending war, right? That he’s foretold to unite the world under his leadership by preaching global peace and solving basically every single problem in the world? So you know when you try to talk to these people about equality and togetherness they literally believe that’s what makes you an agent of the devil right???

parfstar

im sorry what.  so.  ok im assuming they think that this is all like.  to gain trust and then take over or something?  because.

bogleech

Yes, he’s called the “antichrist” because he’s an imposter Jesus and the majority of the world will love him when he ends all class divides and erases all borders, creating one world government with him at the top. That’s the “new world order” they’re terrified of. But they think he’ll oppress true Christian believers who see through his ruse, which is why they’re constantly looking for signs that they’re being discriminated against and panic when they lose any control over government. This is why they fear diversity, immigration, socialized anything. The less religious right are pretty clearly still running on the same logic; they might drop some of the spiritual lore but this is where they get the idea that all progressivism leads to the “real” fascism. Some believe the antichrist isn’t a literal person either but just that entire set of beliefs, so everyone protesting against war and trying to feed the hungry is a *collective* antichrist.

bogleech

So from the notes it turns out people are MUCH less familiar with all this than I suspected and that’s honestly kind of alarming, guys, you should really really pay attention to things that affect so much of this country. No these are absolutely not obscure or fringe beliefs, these are MAINSTREAM with megachurches, Trump voters, the GOP and a vast proportion of the wealthy. Alex Jones and multiple Fox News hosts openly believe word for word what I described here.

And yeah as several people pointed out it isn’t even explicitly in the bible, but something some radicals pieced together in maybe only the last century. My uncles all believe it to the letter and they all believe it’s what the Bible is “supposed” to be communicating.

A lot of people are also confused as to why they would believe the peace and unity are villainous things and what the difference even is then between the “antichrist” and actual Jesus, which brings me to another thing I realize some folks CRITICALLY overlook about American Christianity, which is that they do not believe in good or bad deeds. They believe the same deed can be right or wrong strictly according to whether or not it’s performed by a believer with God’s stamp of approval. Like, they KNOW the Satanic Church and Witch Covens do community service or donate to cancer research and they are not confused, surprised, bitter or embarrassed by that at all. It’s exactly what they’re taught to expect. They believe the forces of Satan do primarily “good” things so people will think he’s just as good or better than God. So if a pastor heals a sick child with a prayer then that’s good, but if a “witch” heals the same sick child with “magic” (not something I believe exists, but they do) then that’s a false miracle from the devil and the child was better off dying because now everyone involved is a sinner who deserves hell. They’re taught to view you as a ridiculous fool if you don’t grasp this difference, and every single argument you might make is a part of the satanic trickery.

After all, they think our entire existence on this Earth is an insignificant speck in the grand scheme of things. The suffering in the world isn’t a bug to them, but a feature that God set up to test everyone’s worthiness, teach them lessons and filter out the faithless, so they actively do not believe it’s always morally right in itself to help people or save lives. Rather, certain people are just intended to suffer and die and it can be MORE wrong to help them.

bogleech

Sorry to put this big ass thing on your dashboards again but I’m downright awestruck by the notes. There’s 15,500 of them at the time of this reblog and almost zero disagreement, just hundreds of people expressing absolute terror that they didn’t realize they were living under the thumb of a doomsday cult, and I’m really really sorry for that because I really did not expect to be the bearer of that news to so many. If you haven’t looked at the notes for yourself though, they’re pretty eye opening even to me, especially the next most common type of response on it:

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….And something I’ve heard before but still neglected to mention:

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…..so that’s all pretty nightmarish confirmation of how pervasive this mindset is around here, but you know, if the majority of reactions to this information have been either “what the fuck are you talking about?” or “yeah I WAS taught this and I’m better now,” maybe that’s a sign that it’s slowly but consistently fading with every generation?

I actually wasn’t raised religious AT ALL, and it was still impossible for me to not hear this shit constantly in the 80′s and 90′s from basically everyone outside my immediate family. It’d even crop up on television and radio stations that weren’t even supposed to be christian-oriented. Just boom, there’s an evangelist suddenly talking about how Only God is Allowed to End War and Satan Takes the Form of Kindness, like these were just normal banal perspectives to toss in between a relationship advice segment and the latest movie reviews.

I’m really proud of every person saying they escaped from that indoctrination and actually feel much better and more hopeful about the whole thing. It might not be fixed completely in our lifetimes but clearly it is fixable.

painkillerscoffeeandcathair

Lack of information only ever benefits bad actors.

ober-affen-geil

If you want to see what this looks like in practice? Without going into a church or religious meeting? Read the Left Behind series. And I do mean read, it has been adapted into movies/video games/radio drama which tbf I have not engaged with, but if you want to see the unironic application of the above stated beliefs into “what would it look like if the prophesied biblical apocalypse as written in the book of Revelations and interpreted by modern day American Christians actually happened” that is what you need to be looking at.

This excerpt from the Wikipedia article probably tells you everything you need to know, but reading them is. An experience.

“Along with some other rapture fiction novels, the Left Behind series demonstrates a specific understanding of the Gospel and the Christian life, one with which many have taken issue theologically. The books have not sold particularly well outside of the United States.”

bolshoiromanova
eevylynn:
“ woodelf68:
“ apricot-studies:
“ dedalvs:
“ incidentalcomics:
“ How to Finish
I drew this poster for Jon Acuff and his FINISH book tour. Big thanks to Jon for this collaboration, his book has some great ideas about how to complete creative...
incidentalcomics

How to Finish

I drew this poster for Jon Acuff and his FINISH book tour. Big thanks to Jon for this collaboration, his book has some great ideas about how to complete creative and life goals.

dedalvs

Love this, but reblogging it specifically for “Get rid of secret rules.” That’s one of the most amazing illustrations—and points—I’ve ever seen.

apricot-studies

so important especially for perfectionists who procrastinate and never finish, or even start because they set such high standards for themselves.

woodelf68

‘Trade perfect for done’ resonates so strongly.

eevylynn

Also, “simplify your task”! There were so many projects in college that I didn’t get nearly as good a grade as I would have if I had simplified it because I always bit off more than I could chew with my grand ideas

fixyourwritinghabits
legsdemandias

Commenting fanfiction is the easiest thing in the world once you start doing it. 

legsdemandias

I leave a comment on every single fic I read. Sometimes when I read published books I go and leave a comment somewhere the author can find it. Granted, I literally majored in ‘leaving comments on fics’ (English Education), but once you start doing it it just becomes second nature. Now you’re gonna go to the Ozymandias school of leaving comments: 

Problem: I can’t leave kudos again.

Beginner: This is a second/third/fourth Kudos

Advanced: This is my second/third/fortieth time reading this, I still love it so much. Here are a few new things I noticed. I like the way you personally do x, y, z compared to other authors I’ve read (in this ship/genre/fandom).

Problem: I don’t know what to say :(

Beginner: Just list what you did to read this fic. “I stayed up late reading this”, “I read this on a crowded train”, “this kept me company while sick”. 

Advanced: X,Y,Z parts made me get butterflies, and I had a physical reaction to this part of the story, I squealed outloud when characters did x,y,z. I blushed at this part. I laughed out loud here. Whatever. 

Problem: I’m embarrassed to leave a comment (what if I annoy the author?)

Beginner: Short answer: you won’t EVER annoy the author (unless you’re needlessly mean) But to start, be generic, you don’t have to spill your soul in the comments section. “I liked this” “I enjoyed reading this” “nice fic”.

Advanced: This really meant a lot to me that you wrote this. This is something I feel like I’ve always wanted to read. This fic hit me in all the right places. Etc. 

Problem: I don’t know how to express myself/my experience 

Beginner: My beginners go to is to highlight a line, put that in your comment and say “i liked this” or to identify basic emotions you had while reading and comment those “this made me happy” “this part made me sad” “i almost cried” “you made me laugh” 
Advanced: “Highlighted line” This line made me smile because it has to do with character development/it’s really romantic/it’s so unique/it’s moving. Sometimes I don’t highlight a line at all, I just talk about the stuff I’ve noticed were unique to the fic. “I love the way you did this particular thing with this character”. 

toybeluga

This? This is an amazing post. This is the Captain Awkward of commenting posts—it addresses all your fears directly and gives you actionable scripts for each one.

quilloftheclouds

Hey! Some of this can apply to responding to works on writeblr, too! Wonderful advice for if you’re stuck on a comment but you really want to leave one (and you should, if you can!).

fixyourwritinghabits
she-who-fights-and-writes

Narrative Botox: Filler Words and Phrases to Look Out For

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If you’re planning on publishing traditionally, chances are you keep a sharp eye on your word count. Literary agents and publishing houses are on the hunt for the best quality stories that they can print for the cheapest price (using the least paper and ink), so you have a higher chance of gaining representation if you can crank your novel out in the least words possible.

However, filler words and phrases aren’t only the enemies of aspiring traditional authors; every writer—fanfic, novelist, journalist, you name it!—should try to eliminate filler from their stories to assure more concise and high-quality writing. Oftentimes, filler contributes nothing but clutter, and without it, your narrative can flow smoother and in a more sophisticated manner.

But how do you know what’s filler and what’s not? Here are some tips on how to Ctrl+F and kick this narrative botox to the curb!

I compiled these lists with the help of Infusionmedia, BDR Publishing, and ResetEra !

Filler Words

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1. Just

A writer’s worst enemy, and the bane of my manuscripts’ existences. Eliminating all the ‘just’s can cut down your word count by hundreds.

2. “That” as a conjunction

It’s an unnecessary addition to a sentence, which will be more streamlined without it.

  • Example: “He said that he wouldn’t do it again.”
  • Revised: “He said he wouldn’t do it again.”

3. “Now” as an adverb

“Now” is essential if you’re talking about the past and present, but when you’re using it to draw attention to a particular statement or point.

  • Example:Now, I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”
  • Revised: “I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”

4. Redundant adverbs

These adverbs serve no purpose because the verbs they’re describing already imply the way the action is performed.

  • Whispering softly
  • Yelling loudly
  • Crying sadly
  • Laughing happily

5. “Telling” words

These words are redundant, especially when using first person, because in describing an event, we can already assume that the characters are experiencing it.

  • Seeing/saw
  • Feeling/felt
  • Hearing/heard
  • Smelling/smelled

6. “Clarifying” words used to portray definiteness or indefiniteness

Although these are meant to help out the readers get their bearings on a situation, all they do is come across as wishy-washy! Be concise and sure of yourself!

  • About
  • Absolutely
  • Accordingly
  • Actually
  • Almost
  • Basically
  • Certainly
  • Clearly
  • Completely
  • Entirely
  • Even
  • Exactly
  • Fairly
  • Highly
  • Hopefully
  • Literally
  • Maybe
  • Only
  • Often
  • Oftentimes
  • Perhaps
  • Possibly
  • Probably
  • Quite
  • Rather
  • Really
  • Reasonably
  • Relatively
  • Seem
  • Seriously
  • Simply
  • Slightly
  • Some
  • Somehow
  • Sometimes
  • Totally
  • Very

Filler Phrases

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1.“Let out (vocal noise)”

Use the verb instead!

  • Example: “He let out a sigh.”
  • Revised: “He sighed.”

2. Using passive voice

Passive voice inflates your word count by including various “to be” verbs into the prose. Passive voice involves actions happening to a subject rather than the subject performing an action, and as a result isn’t as riveting to the reader as active voice; even if it wasn’t a matter of word count, you’d still want to get rid of it anyway!

Still don’t know what I’m talking about? Check out this article from Grammarly.

  • Example: “The boy was bitten by the dog on his arm.”
  • Revised: “The dog bit the boy on his arm.”

3. Describing the wrong noun

Many writers will be as specific as possible about what “thing” is affected by the event they’re describing, when it’s much simpler to take a step back and write about something more general.

  • Example: “The level of water rose.”
  • Revised: “The water rose.”

4. Phrasal verbs

Phrasal verbs are the combination of two or three words from different grammatical categories—a verb and an adverb or a preposition—to form a single action. Usually, these phrasal verbs can be replaced by a single-word verb.

  • “Ask for” can be replaced with “request”
  • “Bring down” can be replaced with “reduce”
  • “Come across” can be replaced with “find”
  • Etc.

5. Clarifying phrases

Same reason as clarifying words. Get to the point!

  • A bit
  • A little
  • A lot
  • In a sense
  • Kind of
  • Sort of

6. Remember your contractions!

Even if your story takes place in olden times, I can guarantee that if you never use any contractions ever, your story’s gonna be a clunky mess. But sometimes you’re in the moment, consumed by the poetic power of the muses, and forget that this isn’t a soap opera; so make sure you check that you’ve been using your contractions!

  • It is, it was, it would, she is, would not, should not, is not, does not etc.

7. Inflated phrases

These phrases can be replaced with more concise words.

  • Along the lines of (shorten to: like)
  • As a matter of fact (in fact)
  • As to whether (whether)
  • At all times (always)
  • At the present (now or currently)
  • At this point in time (now or currently)
  • Be able to/would(n’t) be able to (could or couldn’t)
  • Because of the fact that (because)
  • By means of (by)
  • Due to the fact that (because)
  • Even though (though or although)
  • For the purpose of (for)
  • For the reason that (because)
  • Have the ability to (could)
  • In light of the fact that (because)
  • In order to (to)
  • In regards to (on or about)
  • In spite of the fact that (though or although)
  • In the event that (if)
  • In the nature of (like)
  • In the neighborhood of (about)
  • On the occasion of (when)
  • On one/two separate occasions (Once/twice)
  • The/A majority of (most)
  • There is no doubt that (No doubt)
  • Wasn(n’t) capable of (could or couldn’t)

Hope this helped, and happy writing!

fixyourwritinghabits
she-who-fights-and-writes

Narrative Botox: Filler Words and Phrases to Look Out For

image

If you’re planning on publishing traditionally, chances are you keep a sharp eye on your word count. Literary agents and publishing houses are on the hunt for the best quality stories that they can print for the cheapest price (using the least paper and ink), so you have a higher chance of gaining representation if you can crank your novel out in the least words possible.

However, filler words and phrases aren’t only the enemies of aspiring traditional authors; every writer—fanfic, novelist, journalist, you name it!—should try to eliminate filler from their stories to assure more concise and high-quality writing. Oftentimes, filler contributes nothing but clutter, and without it, your narrative can flow smoother and in a more sophisticated manner.

But how do you know what’s filler and what’s not? Here are some tips on how to Ctrl+F and kick this narrative botox to the curb!

I compiled these lists with the help of Infusionmedia, BDR Publishing, and ResetEra !

Filler Words

image

1. Just

A writer’s worst enemy, and the bane of my manuscripts’ existences. Eliminating all the ‘just’s can cut down your word count by hundreds.

2. “That” as a conjunction

It’s an unnecessary addition to a sentence, which will be more streamlined without it.

  • Example: “He said that he wouldn’t do it again.”
  • Revised: “He said he wouldn’t do it again.”

3. “Now” as an adverb

“Now” is essential if you’re talking about the past and present, but when you’re using it to draw attention to a particular statement or point.

  • Example:Now, I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”
  • Revised: “I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.”

4. Redundant adverbs

These adverbs serve no purpose because the verbs they’re describing already imply the way the action is performed.

  • Whispering softly
  • Yelling loudly
  • Crying sadly
  • Laughing happily

5. “Telling” words

These words are redundant, especially when using first person, because in describing an event, we can already assume that the characters are experiencing it.

  • Seeing/saw
  • Feeling/felt
  • Hearing/heard
  • Smelling/smelled

6. “Clarifying” words used to portray definiteness or indefiniteness

Although these are meant to help out the readers get their bearings on a situation, all they do is come across as wishy-washy! Be concise and sure of yourself!

  • About
  • Absolutely
  • Accordingly
  • Actually
  • Almost
  • Basically
  • Certainly
  • Clearly
  • Completely
  • Entirely
  • Even
  • Exactly
  • Fairly
  • Highly
  • Hopefully
  • Literally
  • Maybe
  • Only
  • Often
  • Oftentimes
  • Perhaps
  • Possibly
  • Probably
  • Quite
  • Rather
  • Really
  • Reasonably
  • Relatively
  • Seem
  • Seriously
  • Simply
  • Slightly
  • Some
  • Somehow
  • Sometimes
  • Totally
  • Very

Filler Phrases

image

1.“Let out (vocal noise)”

Use the verb instead!

  • Example: “He let out a sigh.”
  • Revised: “He sighed.”

2. Using passive voice

Passive voice inflates your word count by including various “to be” verbs into the prose. Passive voice involves actions happening to a subject rather than the subject performing an action, and as a result isn’t as riveting to the reader as active voice; even if it wasn’t a matter of word count, you’d still want to get rid of it anyway!

Still don’t know what I’m talking about? Check out this article from Grammarly.

  • Example: “The boy was bitten by the dog on his arm.”
  • Revised: “The dog bit the boy on his arm.”

3. Describing the wrong noun

Many writers will be as specific as possible about what “thing” is affected by the event they’re describing, when it’s much simpler to take a step back and write about something more general.

  • Example: “The level of water rose.”
  • Revised: “The water rose.”

4. Phrasal verbs

Phrasal verbs are the combination of two or three words from different grammatical categories—a verb and an adverb or a preposition—to form a single action. Usually, these phrasal verbs can be replaced by a single-word verb.

  • “Ask for” can be replaced with “request”
  • “Bring down” can be replaced with “reduce”
  • “Come across” can be replaced with “find”
  • Etc.

5. Clarifying phrases

Same reason as clarifying words. Get to the point!

  • A bit
  • A little
  • A lot
  • In a sense
  • Kind of
  • Sort of

6. Remember your contractions!

Even if your story takes place in olden times, I can guarantee that if you never use any contractions ever, your story’s gonna be a clunky mess. But sometimes you’re in the moment, consumed by the poetic power of the muses, and forget that this isn’t a soap opera; so make sure you check that you’ve been using your contractions!

  • It is, it was, it would, she is, would not, should not, is not, does not etc.

7. Inflated phrases

These phrases can be replaced with more concise words.

  • Along the lines of (shorten to: like)
  • As a matter of fact (in fact)
  • As to whether (whether)
  • At all times (always)
  • At the present (now or currently)
  • At this point in time (now or currently)
  • Be able to/would(n’t) be able to (could or couldn’t)
  • Because of the fact that (because)
  • By means of (by)
  • Due to the fact that (because)
  • Even though (though or although)
  • For the purpose of (for)
  • For the reason that (because)
  • Have the ability to (could)
  • In light of the fact that (because)
  • In order to (to)
  • In regards to (on or about)
  • In spite of the fact that (though or although)
  • In the event that (if)
  • In the nature of (like)
  • In the neighborhood of (about)
  • On the occasion of (when)
  • On one/two separate occasions (Once/twice)
  • The/A majority of (most)
  • There is no doubt that (No doubt)
  • Wasn(n’t) capable of (could or couldn’t)

Hope this helped, and happy writing!